Another Post is Up on 365

[skonen_blades]

Another post is up on 365. This one is called 'Battle'. See what you think. I don't know what to say to introduce it. Let me know if you like it.

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[kousu.livejournal.com]

Yeyy cyborgs :3.

The last line, "happy monsters", feels kind of weak, and it's sort of hard to follow the imagery a bit in the middle, but awesome idea.

[skonen-blades.livejournal.com]

Yeah, I agree. I think that maybe this one needed a rewrite. It's more of a tech-poetry experiment than anything else. You've got a good eye. Needs tightening.