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This is a playground.

Ganesh and Shiva are skateboarding, sporting ripped jeans and body piercings as they carom around the swells and hollows of the concrete park.

Ganesh’s skateboard is strong enough to support his weight and wide enough to support his feet. It’s a monster-truck version of an ironing board. He goes up off the lip of the park’s rim, supporting his weight on one tusk for a time-stretching second before arcing back to earth.

Shiva gathers speed down into the valley before pumping into the vertical that leads straight up into summer afternoon sky. Her wallet chain scrapes the concrete. A shower of sparks chases her up out of the park into the air.

She hangs there for a second, all of her arms splayed out like an asterisk, like DaVinci’s Vitruvian Man drawing come to life, like a throwing star, before gravity coaxes her back down the well.

She’s quick at getting the board back under her taloned feet before meeting the wall again in a speed-ridden kiss. Her sandals hold on tight to the turns she’s taking. She stretched out the armholes of the wife-beater she’s wearing to be wide enough for all of her arms. Her handplants are a staccato triple-slap that echo around the park.

She turns a many-spoked cartwheel that would make a bicycle tire jealous.

Ganesh’s hoodie flaps in the wind as he punishes the bounds with which gravity shackles him. Momentum becomes his ally as he crashes into turns with the sound of a locomotive turning into a roller coaster. He trumpets his joy through his trunk as he leans low.

On his grey-blue skin, three tattooed tears creep out from behind his Oakleys. The dozens of hoops he has through each of his massive ears ring like jingle bells in the wind. Graffiti wraps each thick tusk. Tags from friends. They’re like ‘get well’ scribbles on a cast only these ones say ‘get better’ and they never go away. They’re there in front of him all day, every day, telling him to keep going.

The tattooed tears say that it’s hard, mama. It’s hard.

They both have tribal whorls, celtic curls, and ancient symbols wrapped in ink around their bodies. These tattoos embrace them in the symbols of their new culture.

Jesus sits back from the edge, an orange beard on his chin. He smokes, sitting on an amp, the elbows fraying on his loose, green cardigan. He’s Kurt Cobain come back to watch.

Bast is beside him, boobs swollen with implants, thong rising high out of tight and fraying jeans; a porn hopeful. Her giant eyes trace every movement of the skaters. Her ears swivel like radar dishes, seeking out the sounds of tiny prey.

Mohammed is beside them, rocking the IPod, listening to the old Beasties concept album about 911 and nodding his head.

These three and dozens of others ring the lip of the park, waiting for their turn to skate or just congregating to watch because there’s nothing else to do on a school day.




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Date: 19 Nov 2007 05:13 (UTC)
From: [identity profile] porphyre.livejournal.com
That's great. Not sure about that last line, but still.. impressively nice.

Date: 19 Nov 2007 05:20 (UTC)
From: [identity profile] skonen-blades.livejournal.com
Yeah, me neither. At the end, I always have an urge to go meta or provide a moral or a big picture or a conclusion or something. When it's reaching, like this one clearly is, it can gut the piece instead of enhance it. Do you think I should just give this ending the scissors?

Date: 19 Nov 2007 05:23 (UTC)
From: [identity profile] skonen-blades.livejournal.com
Grrr. Yeah, it's weak. It rises up and has nothing to do with the rest of the piece. It's gone.

Date: 19 Nov 2007 05:25 (UTC)
From: [identity profile] skonen-blades.livejournal.com
For anyone wondering, this was the previous last line:

These are the updated gods worshipped by the children of immigrants. They are as apathetic as the teenagers that are told to worship them. They were all molested as children by advertising. They care about nothing.

What do you think? Do you agree that it belongs on the bonfire?
Edited Date: 19 Nov 2007 05:25 (UTC)

Date: 19 Nov 2007 08:14 (UTC)
From: [identity profile] porphyre.livejournal.com
Take that and stick it up earlier somewhere, minus the line about not caring.

Date: 19 Nov 2007 08:46 (UTC)
From: [identity profile] skonen-blades.livejournal.com
I see what you're saying but I'm just going to leave it out. It smacks of some sort of political statement about 'kids these days' instead of just painting a pretty picture. I'm just going to leave it as a picture.

Date: 19 Nov 2007 14:50 (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kousu.livejournal.com
Being nearly a kid-these-days myself, I didn't see that. Well, maybe it is "kids these days" but it isn't political, it isn't saying they are good or bad for it. It adds to the picture.
But don't put it at the end.


What Beasties album is that? It's way before my time.

Date: 19 Nov 2007 15:02 (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kousu.livejournal.com
On the other hand, it's much more mysterious and eerie if there's just a bunch of deities sk8ing without any explanation of how they got there.

Date: 19 Nov 2007 18:56 (UTC)
From: [identity profile] skonen-blades.livejournal.com
Yeah exactly.

Date: 19 Nov 2007 18:56 (UTC)
From: [identity profile] skonen-blades.livejournal.com
I see what you mean about it being neither positive or negative but it changes the context of the story, really, and kind of rips off Neil Gaiman's American Gods. Thanks, though.

June 15th 2004. It was called 'To the Five Burroughs' and was pretty much dedicated to commenting on the state of post-911 America and the resulting wars in the Middle East. It was an uncharacteristically political album but they felt they had a responsibility to join other artists and say something, especially since they're actually from NY and all.
Myself, I didn't groove on it too, too much but I liked some of the tracks.

Date: 20 Nov 2007 07:37 (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
I rather like the "molested by advertising as children", although I agree about the other cuts. Of course, then you'd have to find a home for it earlier. -Arwen

Date: 20 Nov 2007 08:13 (UTC)
From: [identity profile] skonen-blades.livejournal.com
I like that phrase as well but it might have a better place in a different story that was more centered around it. Glad you liked it, though.

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